Undercover_Ninja

From what you showed it looks to me like an exiting book. When you post the rest I will love to read it. I am very curious who these soldiers ...

Wow! It will be awfully hard to critique that. Extremely well-written, great descriptions and personalities. That plushoriam world has me confused a bit, but that's good. Reminds me a little ...

Well some could spend years critiquing it because it's so long. An idea would be to make them into separate posts :( Some were good, others were quite simple, but ...

That is a creative, imaginative story. I agree with Kaylyn, a few grammatical errors and a slightly blunt style. I think if you added a few more details, such as ...

Hey I tried to fix what you told me :D . Anything I missed, Or anything else that needs fixing? I don't think of Kyle as me anymore, really. If ...

Technically it may be different, but honestly I would feel just as guilty if I condemned the 5 people as I would blowing up 5 people. And yes I would ...

Nice piece overall. It shows a great perspective, and sounds pretty cool. Good vocabulary, which I have never had. I'm just glad that I will spend my infinite eternity in ...

Kyle pedaled down the driveway and parked his bike in the garage. He then walked inside and went straight to his room. He dropped onto his bed, exhausted. There he ...

Yeah remember I can't do romance, so you will have to write the script for that, and I would welcome it. It's funny as soon as I posted this book ...

Wow I found that very entertaining and humorous! Yes, it's random and retarted, but that's the best part! :( ! That was a creative idea, good for a kids book.

I wrote a review for this on the other one. But it is a very intriguing book, can't wait to read more!

Like, say there was a shipwreck and there are four survivors. They are all in a small dingy little boat, starving, parched, and about to die. They decide that they ...

That's pretty cool! Yeah I think you could put in more deatail with your talent :wink: . I look up at the sky above me Above the ceiling of water ...

OK thanks! By the way this whole story is revolved around the climax, which I imagined in detail. I have written a basic outline for it so I won't forget. ...

Yeah that's the one at FCA. HaHA I hadn't planned on romance in it, but if you want it I will let you put it in :wink: . I'll let ...