UncleJimmy

Okay, I see what you mean. Thanks.

The Tears of Battle I sprang into the fight, wildly swinging my sword with adrenaline before I regained control of myself. I reined myself under control (Repetition, probably try to ...

I haven't finished this story because I ran into a stone wall. I have already basically written all that I had on my plot, and whatever else is on the ...

The world was black. An all consuming Should be "all-consuming" black. I was weightless. The darkness pushed in on my soul, my lungs were struggling Not a big deal, but ...

The Incredible Ice Cube I remember it was year 88 B.C. and I was running from the other kids in the tribe. I was running and tripped and fell on ...

I've never read Ranger's Apprentice series, but your characterization is good, and you described the background in fair detail without boring the reader. Good work I'd say.

Interesting. Brings out the fact that fire can become a raging monster at any moment. I've fought 3 wildfires, so I know what it is like with the heavy smoke, ...

When I'm working on my first draft, I usually just flesh out the character during the course of the story. When writing 'Real-Life' I use a Random word generator that ...

Jay Crocker, an ex-FBI agent, gets involved in a gang/drug bust, after his son (who was in the FBI) is killed by them. He discovers Federal help is behind the ...