UncleJimmy

The unpredictability of being a bus driver :) Great writing.

Perfectly correct!! I've tried to capture fear in a couple of my unfinished stories, and failed miserably.

Great writing!!! Other than a few spelling errors, and some punctuation problems, it's a great story. Keep it up.

Wow!!! You've got some deep thoughts there. Beyond a few misspellings, it is a great story.

The blade, whistling through the air, stopped inches from my heart. “No,” he whispered”, I will not” “Why,” I asked him, looking into his emerald eyes, he was ordered to, ...

Chapter 2 Neighbour-less Number Thirteen Thirteen 'years' later... Suzy blinked, and then stared at the house in front of her, her mouth hung open in astonishment. She clenched her fists ...

This does sound like a fable, and reminds me of a Native American origin story. I like the fact that there are no spelling mistakes. Same here!! Great storyline.

Interesting story. But, I have a question. Why would they be racing, simply because they are the only two people left in the world?

Interesting. I like to give enough description so the reader can see in his mind without having to break from the story, and visualize the characters, objects and places. (sometimes ...

I've heard some of these before, but never tried to apply any.

Not familiar with Gatsby (Though I've heard is name) Pretty interesting paragraphs. :LOL:

Farts, the curse of romance. Great writing!!!

The only thing I can think of is that her father hated Henry.

Great!!! A few spelling errors, but the characterization? Wow! what a treat.

I trimmed it up, thanks to your help.