TylynRae

This was really good. I liked how you described a soccerball as a beast. I had absolutely no idea what was going on and then BAM! The last line tied ...

This was a very... unique poem. It gave me a melancholy feeling. Because you look at a peach and its beautiful, at least to me, but then you point out ...

Gosh, how you pull these off I have no idea. You must live in some sort of photography EDEN or something. You have such diverse subject matter and all of ...

I. Love. SUPERNATURAL! This is a lovely idea and I think they look amazing. Nicely done =]]

I'm not sure if I've commented on this one though I feel like I've seen it before.. but anyway, like the first commenter said, the right wing is a bit ...

Okay, I think this is a really great way to start off part two. Layia sounds beautiful. The one thing I was a bit iffy on his how quickly you ...

Ah, the last of the Part One =]. Okay, I think this is a pretty good ending, but I think there should just be a hint more of intensity in ...

Nice descriptions on the warlocks in this one. I think I'd just change the opening a bit. We know she's in pain, and you say its a looot of pain, ...

The one iffy part I found in this one is the part where they're reading the scroll. You explain what exactly it's saying, but I think you could have done ...

The dream scene is really good in this, you sort of forget they were sleeping in the first place =]. At least I think it was a dream... I'm pretty ...

I don't think its too boring =]. Anyway, the one scene I would improve on is the part where they have to show that they're harmless. It reminds me of ...

I'm working my way back through all of these trying to leave comments. I read all of the ones that were in the category and its quite a handful, haha ...

Aww, this one was a bit sad for me when I read it. You're descriptions on the unicorns were really good. Especially when you were saying the value of each ...

WIth this one, I liked the conclusion a lot. It was really suspenseful. The one thing I would do with all of yoru chapters is shorten them a bit, break ...

I forgot to comment on this one, I read all of them, so I think I'm just going to ponit out a few things I liked in each. The little ...