TylynRae

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! If you have any questions or concerns you could ask just about anyone. And if WE can't answer them, then you can ask Nate. He's ...

Hello there =]. Okays, so I think this looked really great. But myone concern is that the cover of the story doesn't match the time period that the story takes ...

There were a lot of silly punctuation and grammatical errors in this that deserve to have a look through. Overall, I really liked the Pigs POV, it was sort of ...

Qara caught most of the nit picks, so I don't think I'm going to get into that. Overall its pretty good, and you got fairly good responses from previous reviewers. ...

I love noobies! Anyway. I was new a few months ago, and I had all of the same questions. So its all good =] You can post anything on here. ...

When I saw the title of this poem I thought of this book by Mary Downing Hahn called The Doll In The Garden. She's a really good thriller writer for ...

Hello there. You have a really good rhythm for about two lines. And those lines were in the middle. I think what you're getting at is good but the stanzas ...

Hello. Welcome to YWS! Firstly, I'd like to say, like Elinor, this piece neeeds to be devied up into paragraphs. When I first opened it, I almost clicked out of ...

I think I'm just getting grumpy at reviews... growl. But this piece could have used a little bit of improvement. I totally agree with Smyling on all counts. It just ...

Um... well. I don't think its the best ideas for their to be a sad face as the title or an emoticon at the end of the poem. its just ...

Haha, this is really cute and I really enjoyed it. The flow was good and for some reason it reminded me of Little Miss Muffit, it just had that feeling ...

One: Get rid of the smilies! Changing the font color and adding smilies is just... really amateurish and isn't the way to make people take you seriously as a writer. ...

Ah, this gave me goosebumps. I'm not sure why. But it did. It's like.. the ultimate betrayal. I think you should definitely expand this, maybe try writing abotu this same ...

Hello there =] This was really lovely. The only thing I would change is the formatting. The lines are a bit too long, so maybe shorten them up a bit.

Holy crap! This was absolutely amazing. I found it other the reccomendations and boy, were they right to reccomend it! I thought the last part was just... crazy amazing. Gosh. ...