Twiceuponatime

Woah wtf?!?!?! This is insane, i want more!! Love it!

Hola im Ella, I shall be your critic today. :) i have to saythat this is one of the best things i have ever read on this site, and thats ...

I would reccomend getting to know her first before you do anything. I am saying this from experience because this one new guy put this note in my locker that ...

I really like what you have written so car in your story, i just read the whole thing today. I think the whole ryan/johnathan thing is really confusing, what happened ...

Gah!!! This was amazing itwas very interesting you should definitly write more im soeager to read the rest. It was a perfect length, some people wright things too long or ...

Wow catherine i didnt know u could write this well, this is ella by the way

I definitly think you should keep writing this is really interesting.

Hola twiceuponatime here, i really like your story but i have a few minor critiques. 1) you say ace too much it kind of gets repetitive. 2)at the end make ...

Ok i found a few minor mistakes that will help the story flow better. 1) you say its valentines day and the last day of school, explain that more because ...

You did not wlaborate this enough it could be a whole lot longer like a few chapters maby but you compacted it into a few paragraphs.

"You probably noticed how it looks like a flower," she paused to let me nod. " That is because, you are . We have shrunk down to size and then ...

omg i love these stories they are soooo amazing keep writing!!!!! :elephant: