Tusker93

Jesus was an inspiration to many people in the world and is indeed a great role-model for humanity. Though there's aspects of him we don't understand there's definitely no doubt ...

It's got a nice little message, the style is concise and efficient too. Spelling and grammar honestly seem fine to me. And you're right I suppose the beauty of it ...

There were a couple spelling errors I noticed but I have to say I was totally absorbed from the beginning to the end. I've never read twilight or any other ...

That was really something! :o. I usually dislike poetry that doesn't rhyme but this had me interested all the way true. It's really emotional and I could easily picture the ...

Religion is basically a collection of beliefs. Science and Religion are similar in that they're basically a collection of beliefs that're agreed upon by certain groups of people. Not everyone ...

are you intending to write a whole book in rhymes ? o.O Just asking. like good old Dr. Seuss :lol:. Liked this poem, hope you keep writing.

Depends if you mean that there should be law that you can't lie then with our current capabilities it'd be impossible to enforce. If you mean if human beings weren't ...

That was really something, just wow. If I was the guy reading this at first I'd be thinking "my god she's such a fucking loser' but after a couple lines ...

Hey there :) welcome to YWS, if you need help or a critique on somethin' don't hesitate to ask ;).

It's almost like a true story. Really nicely written overall and got a true message. Got to me definitely. I really liked the way you wrapped it up, creepy but ...

Sounds promising - I'd like to hear more :) Sorry I can't go into detail now got to go off I'll give a deeper comment sometime later though.

That was fantastic. I've not got much to say except you should write more like this :D! It flowed, the rhyming was great, the imagery spot on - it was ...

Obama made a good move in the sense that Joe Biden makes his foreign policy image look a bit better. But easily a better move with the voters would've been ...

Let's not get distracted, when you point a finger at someone there's four fingers pointing back at you. No, I never killed anybody. So, no one would have any reason ...

I really liked that! It was so nicely worded that you didn't care whether it rhymed or not after a few lines. This isn't much of a critique I know ...