TreeHugger12

Actually, I saw several problems with punctuation and missing letters. Aside from this, great job! It's really like reading a book. Though one must wonder if Maria had been trained ...

No, no, no!!! Don't stop! these stories are great! I love them... They are quite good.... I want to know what happened and what is going to happen to Alice! ...

When I received your PM, I was all "Yay! Shifters! Shifters!" I love the way you put the mood in perfectly. I'm not really good at criticizing and my grammar's ...

Yes i was wondering how old these bullies were when I read the part about plunging Clara underwater... Unless this is a place ravaged by war or as hero stated, ...

Yes, as the others have said, you have a rather confusing way of describing things. But it was all very good actually. And it wasn't as confusing as the first. ...

Well, It was good but the descriptions were a bit to confusing. You might overwhelm the reader. I actually tend to skip those kinds of parts where you describe so ...

I liked this better than the first. You really are getting better. Could you PM me when you upload the third?

Oh, by the way, PM me the next time you post a chapter. :)

I'm sorry, I haven't written in a while. This is actually an "old" story. I got a bad case of writer's block. So I wasn't able to read it or ...

Thanks for all your posts! I know I have a lot to learn. Thanks for your comments. they were helpful! I think I might have a problem with describing the ...

Wow, you left me breathless. But somehow, it seemed quite short. I'm not really good at reviewing or critiquing or that stuff but, I think I know enough to say ...

I think If you've played the game (or have a talkative cousin or brother who does) you'll understand the story. It's a great narration of that scene. So full of ...

Ahaha, that was certainly an interesting twist. Maybe you should have added in the detail that his eyes turn black when he's about to feed. Poor Charlie though, he's about ...

OMG HAHAHA I was literally laughing out loud. My mom gave me one of those 'my daughter is crazy for bursting out into hysterical laughter over nothing' looks. Ahhh... *wipes ...

I agree with Sae, you did sound a lot like Steph Meyer. In general, I'm a twi-hater but what the heck, I read the books so I know about it. ...