Torpid

Thanx for the thundering shots, i will use that later. I'm writing more of it now and there is about to be a shooting... ~Torpid

That is strikingly similar to this book i've read but that cool. I was just thinking the other day about asking Rowling if i could write on Sirius's adventures while ...

i've been waiting for someone to reply to it. Thanx for the tumble thing, i thought the same thing. The gnome and decently dressed man in the corner were the ...

Thanks for the facinating remark and wanting to read, zelithon, the well done, jigsaw, and the good overall, ladydark Bard 2 iz out. it is about another character that will ...

He's done lots of work with assassin stories. Who's Ryan?

Removed. 8) I thank all those who critiqued it.

I really dont think there is going to be any more alien invasion...i wrote it cuz i had come to a dead end...there wasnt much thought in it or effort. ...

there it iz guyz, dig in!

Guess what! This was also removed. And again, if you critiqued it, I thank you.

Is this a prologue, a first chapter, or the entire story? Until i know this I will reserve my judgement. otherwise, here are some suggestions: It had reached its peak ...

That was awesome...and your only eleven. Ah, see the foolishness of judging a person by age? That was very good. I like it. I dont come to the Poetry area ...

Aviator, The Alien's are attacking because o' this jemstone which is important for some reason......

This is an angle from the other characters story. Banzai, Thavyr, and a few others will meet. Banzai Shimoto, the infamous assassin, made his way silently down the old cobblestone ...

A brief, but good invasion thriller. Well-written. Personally, I would've liked to see more backstory, though. Why are the aliens attacking? What is their "objective"? ...Just my opinion. Thank you, ...

Cool, good story... nice angle on abortion, unique. Awesomely Fantastico, give it an A. It got a tad bit confusing at the end for the not-so-sharp reader though.