Torpid

this poem was writtin when my frien was like nine and now hes twelve. the numbers on my computer quite working and they took most of the punctuation keys with ...

I CAME HERE THINKING OF ZEPP AND THE 1ST THING I SAW WAS ABOUT THEM, SHHWIIING! sweet

7 or 8 that cool, kinda funny

1. The Bible Tis a pretty good book 2. R.A. Salvatore's Drizzt Books. (Notice the Avatar) Simply, they're just great books, good, 'elaborate' characters, exciting storylines, etc. 3. Artemis Fowl ...

Well, now that Jiggy's gone who'll read my story? I know what comes next but im gunna wait to write it for just a little bit...

I like it, -4 ph acid? It'd technically be 4ph acid. cause it goes from 1-14 but its GOOD! NICE! EXCELLENT! SWEET! MIGHTY FINE WORK! A! Has potential. You've earned ...

Good....but sad

The next day, Christopher awoke to a crashing metal on metal sound, echoing through the halls into Joker Squad's room. He sat up in his bed and glanced around. The ...

Thanks for the PM, Jigsaw, thanks everybody else who commented, i need more though. I'll do the next part soonish probably....Gooday. ~Torpid

Original and intrigieng (sp), interesting, kinda scary, abstract, has potential.

Well, for a first draft, the grammar and spelling and punctuation looks good to me. But, it didn't grab my attention that much so I'd just say to work on ...

We really liked swords dont we....swords are cool though. Nice work.

Yea you guys are right, i didn't put a lot of effort or descript into this story, its short, not my best, i had some spare time. It reminded me ...

I liked the description of the 'soldier's' thoughts and stuff. very good, nice picture and descript. I want more. Good ending/hook...Ever Onward Jigsaw. ~Torpid p.s. One o' Them War Stories ...

I revised the hexi outta that last installment and now im posting this so it recirculates as new, read it and tell me what u think of the BETTER version. ...