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i think that everyone else has covered grammatical errors, but honestly i didn't even really notice the grammer mistakes. So i'm going to talk about the plot and story line. ...

First off, I loved the girl telling the story. She reminds me of me in a good way. It was almost scarily realistic. Well done. Second, I would describe Aaron ...

Watch capitalization. It makes it less fun to read. I really like the characterization of Patricia, even if the dialouge is not believable sometimes. I wouldn't be so epic. Foreshadowing ...