Took

i think that everyone else has covered grammatical errors, but honestly i didn't even really notice the grammer mistakes. So i'm going to talk about the plot and story line. ...

First off, I loved the girl telling the story. She reminds me of me in a good way. It was almost scarily realistic. Well done. Second, I would describe Aaron ...

Watch capitalization. It makes it less fun to read. I really like the characterization of Patricia, even if the dialouge is not believable sometimes. I wouldn't be so epic. Foreshadowing ...

the best part i think was the ending. especially the last two lines. good stuff. i agree with some previous replies though, addy says certain words that i never used. ...

"Aw, come on Ry, please stop. I hate when you do that before a show." I took a long drag on my cigarette before throwing it to the floor and ...

Opening credits end on a sign for Terminal A-10. Brown curly hair is visible under the sign, but no head. Zoom out to a typical airport terminal. CHAZ is fully ...

Hi, I'm Took, It's pretty awesome to finally find a site with other YOUNG writers. I'm really tired of old people writing what they think kids go through. I really ...