TolyVilapoo

Hey Could you do me a favour and review the works I've posted, its not alot, just chek in my portfolio. thanks

The changes within... I’m cold... My legs are drawn up to my chest, but still I feel the chill against my breast. The chill is not of this world, But ...

1.)The changes within... I’m cold... My legs drawn up to my chest, Still I feel the chill against my breast. The chill is not from the world, But rather from ...

Hey thanks for the advice man. I've edited the story tel me what you think guys. still feel i could do a bit more to it. hoping for more feedback.

Hey thanks for those little pointers. hmm I'm working on improving the story, i should be lengthening it soon and providing a little more insight into his life and stressed ...

Hey I must say I enjoyed this piece. the imagery and feelings portrayed by your were just brilliant. Though I felt that now and then it did not flow as ...

This was more of an essay rather than a short story. Wrote it for school, which meant i had a word limit, was kind of hoping for some opinions. I'm ...

Hey I enjoyed the poem from start to finish, your descriptions were brilliant, I could really picture this in my minds eye. Yet in terms of poetry i felt that ...

8ta...lol Hmm first of all your opening was brillinat, it immediatelt caught my attention, and it was due to that opening that I continued to read more. Must say though ...

Heya AWW thank you! lol oooopss sorry about that! my friend tells me i write with to much A.F.B.S (Airy Flairy Bull ...) guess there are some people who like ...

HEEEEEEEEEEEYYYYYYYY Thanks for all the great feedback people. hmm I'v gone over the poem and edited it. I still fell i could make a few more adjustments, just wondering what ...

Hey dude 1. Pretty weird picture, had me wondering why??? lol 2. loved this one. brilliant focusing of the camera, is it just me or is that ant laughing at ...

Dude! Brilliantly done, especially considering that you did this in two minutes. hmm i think it'll look good on my wall. lol hope you win that competition, I don't think ...

Hey Thanks life, had you not pointed out the exclamation marks to me i would never have realised. I hope to repost the story with your suggestions. Thanks for the ...

lol Bozi that's a friend you hitting out at there. lol Thanks for the help though, I've been workiong on revising the poem, like I said I wrote this quite ...