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Im sorry this is so long but there was no where that was appropriate to stop at. Hope you enjoy Titch The Vampires Kiss Part 2 The sun broke through ...

Good start, I really enjoyed it (I'm a huge vampire fan) I agree with a lot of what *coco has said so I'm not gonna go in to details; you ...

Interesting start and i like the diary format but you've got to think where is this story going, its really easy to start like you have in quite a negative ...

Don't be so hard on yourself, it is a good story I enjoyed it. The strength of it is in your understanding of dialogue, and that really brings the story ...

I enjoyed this start but you really need to read your work through after you've written it because in places there are spelling mistakes and words missed out which make ...

Hi, There's some really good bits of that story, it definitely shows promise and now your older I'm gonna be interested in reading some of your newer work. The reason ...

Hi, really good start and if you can develop it along the same lines I think it will become a very strong short story. You've created a brilliant clear narrative ...

Thank You, More Should Follow On Wednesday Hopefully. Not Making It Twilight Is Something Ive Always Been Thinking About So I Hope It Wont Become Like Those Books x

Hi thanks for your interest, this is the third timing (I think) I have posted this story but I think its got promise. I just keep getting stuck and frustrated ...

As I fell in to bed that night so many questions flew round my head, “Where was he? Was he okay? Was the person he was feeding on okay? How ...

Hey that was a good start and i'll be intrigued to see where it goes, just a couple of points i pick up on, but nothing major: "Hello, you must ...

The door creaked open and there Lucas stood shrouded in light. A hush fell across the bar as took his normal seat. 'Hi' was the only thing I could say ...

just a quick point this doesnt follow on from the recent part 2, part 2 incorporates this bit Titch xx

Hi Again i really enjoyed reading this!! I disagree with jsull60880 tbh i like the formal narration (sorry jsull60880) i think it gives the story a lovely tone! I picked ...

Very Good Story really enjoyed reading it and i going to go on and read the next two chapters in a second. I just wanted to mention a couple of ...