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Re: Flight 764-Chapter 1
This piece kept you hanging. First, the fact that he was unlucky even though he won the lottery. Then, he gets mugged, and it doesn't really faze him, except for ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Look, Ma
That poem was very powerful, and you could feel the tension in the room. I really liked it.
May 16, 2011 -
Re: First kiss
I really liked it! It was well written, and captured the way he felt about Amber. It had true passion, and I could feel the moment. You were very descriptive, ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Her Unlucky Cup of Coffee
Hey! I really liked it. I think it would be great if you made it into a novel, and the fight scene after sounds good too. One nitpick though: [quote] ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Tesseract - Chapter 8
I liked it. It made me feel as creeped out as she did. one thing though. There.. right before me, in one of the last torture devices hung Jason. after ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Tesseract - Chapter 7
It kept me hooked. i want to know how this is happening, why, and If she will find out her true identity. Her are a few things i spotted. Reluctantly ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Tesseract - Chapter 6
I was mesmerized by this chapter. I just wanted to find out more. You should add to this chapter because it seemed kinda short. Other than that, it was a ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Sons of Mars
I really liked it. You captured the readers attention because they don't know whats going on in the beginning. On that note, the beginning confused me a bit but you ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Finding Perfection.
I love it! It is such a good chapter! I only noticed a couple of things. It was still such a shook to her, such a surprise. Instead of the ...
May 3, 2011 -
Re: The Missing Link Prologue and Chapter one
Prologue It was dark. Being with their newly born daughter put hope in their hearts. "Do you think they will be able to save him?" the worried mother asked her ...
Apr 30, 2011 -
Re: Art by Via (Updated 1/19/08)
The cake looks delicious, and i REALLY like the pictures from the wedding. Your a great photographer! -Titan
Apr 26, 2011 -
Re: A reason, A season
I'm not very poetic myself, but I really like it! Keep writing! -Titan
Apr 26, 2011 -
Re: The Unwanted ( Chapter one )
Hey Lilybean! I love your story so far. You really capture the way Violet feels, and describe her. I can't wait to read more! :D :) ;) -Titan
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: Azila must watch Rebecca Black's Friday
Hawnestly, if you watch Rebecca Black sing Friday, you WILL want to laugh in her face. Her song sounds terrible and it will give you a reason to have a ...
Apr 12, 2011 -
Re: Candy Kiss
This is really good! Keep writing! I can't wait to read more of your writing! -Titan
Apr 8, 2011