Tigersprite

Got down the everyday emotions of a labourious housewife to a T. I like how you play with the words, in a single poem you let us connect easily through ...

It's confusing enough that I wanted to read it through. As PadrePio pointed out, you need to put in some more commas to make the story seem more natural. But ...

This story is rather interesting. The language is sort of old, but it only adds to the story. One mistake I noticed though: Even skipper spared him a good clouting ...

This is the result of bored writing. With this pen I can craft. I can construct a marvelous mountain that reaches to the sky with snow capping the peak. I ...

Beautiful poem, only problem was that you didn't need to leave the space between go and to in the third line of the second stanza. Nice job! =) TIGERSPRITE

My nitpicks are pretty much the same as wickedwonder's. Aside from that, it was a pretty good poem. TIGERSPRITE

Nice, short and simple story. It reminds me of something I read in a short story anthology somewhere. It weighed down my finger, a constant reminder of who I should ...

There isn't much to correct other than everything mentioned above, good job. The poem was interesting and creative. TIGERSPRITE

I did love you And I still do But you turned away While I called out to you I think 'When' would have been better for emphasis than 'while'. Baby ...

Welcome TheWrittenChef! I'm a newbie myself, but welcome to the site anyway! Lots of stuff to do here, I'm sure you'll enjoy becoming a member. TIGERSPRITE

A pretty decent poem, if I read it correctly, about a soldier who prays that they don't die on the battlefield, but who dies anyway, and the narrator feels that ...

This is pretty good actually (you haven't seen my friend's sketches). Didn't know people could post their drawings on here; I'll have to do it sometime.

Dancing Away The Night They called me as I was at my bedroom window, My kindred, amigo. They called me to the forest under the moonlight clearing, Ere I went, ...

There is nothing but truth in this, and I can easily recognize many of things in it. But let me help you with a few mistakes. This is what the ...

Creepy. The descriptions are done well, especially how Tim talks of how he likes to walk around at night. But I don't understand why Tim stopped thinking of Lockhart as ...