Threnody

So what if you're weird? At least you're not NORMAL! (insert gasp here) Yeah. I once know a friend who was ADDICTED TO WOW. it was crazy. Basically he wouldn't ...

Melaina “My sister? I haven’t met her since I was born! Why should I have to now?” I whined feeling very contrary and very grouchy. I was standing in an ...

I think it's good. It needs to flow more however. You don't need to rhyme to make this poem sound good. Alot of discription is added and I think it ...

This is a very powerful poem. I think though, that you should get to the point in the beginning. Also, punctuation would be nice. Otherwise, I think that this was ...

The repitition of "Flowing, Growing" should be changed. Otherwise you're good.

The tuning note is played by the oboe, turning red. "can we stop now!?" Over there the bassoons, are screeching like baboons "Give it a rest!" Perfect flutes remain perfectly ...

Hmm. Nice. I think I like it. But here are some grammer issues and etc. [/quote] only to come down there is an over use of the word "to" how ...

Okay so, LivingFantasy, You just basically pulled apart his WHOLE POEM! You may as well rewrite it for him. But don't worry Lukas, I liked it. But maybe you could ...

My GOSH everyone! You guys are being so mean! I mean really. It was a good thought. It does need stanzas though. I could hardly read it because it ran ...

I stand in repose. This is the only time when I'm really at ease, and the silver lining on my slippers match those on the clouds. And when he's sketching ...

He thinks to himself quite frankly Maybe it should be "He thinks to himself quite honestly, or such. Whilst everything was the matter Make this part a little more clear. ...

I know. It's absolutely terrible

She was so full of sun, and happiness, and love. So carefree. She was only seven And she wore her star. To her it was an emblem of power. Until ...

OKAY FINE! My Dæmon- is Aedian I am- Amaya Bordeaux I am: active, a bit vain, secretive, quiet, would make a good spy one day. I absolutely adore: My Dæmon, ...

Jealous? (insert scoff here)