Threnody

HIYA! :D

COOKIES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D

Hmm. Quite interesting. I liked the plot. Though it does need some more info. A prologue would be nice. I need to know more about these people in order to ...

Wonderful. Just amazing. It flowed very well and it doesn't hide too much nor give away too much. It was a perfect beginning to a great story. Tell me when ...

I like it. A lot. I do agree with the punctuation though. But... I added in your commas for you! *yay* It was very blush inducing but nicely written. And ...

I think it was beautifully written. It is mysterious with a haunting air. I do love it. Don't worry what anyone says. I only have one question- They are the ...

Pippa wandered the halls of the orphanage early that morning. She had gotten up quietly without a word. She was going to figure out what happened to Leo and May. ...

Very delicious. I love the plot and the whole problem. It's all wonderful. This is one of the only mistakes I found although I do think that you should format ...

Excellent job with this. The punctuation could be more accurate, but it made your point very well. ignore the blood that floods your breast Perhaps "drowns your breast," or "swamps ...

Like, since he took her eyes, is she blind or what?

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WHAT HAPPENED TO LEO!!!!!!!!!!!!! :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock:

"Mrs. Gullen, I hate you." Pippa stated. Mrs. Gullen looked shocked and she just stood there trying to comprehend what had just been said. That was the whole plan. While ...

It's noise. If I change it I'll need to change the whole rhyme scheme of that stanza. Hmmmmmm.

Ha. I get it. So ignore the post above me. *Sorry* just confused...