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Okay that part with her bleeding... that's freaky. I want to read more! I noticed that some of your sentences got really choppy. I was also wondering how she opened ...

Umm... okay. First of all right now your character seems like a Mary Sue. (Mary Sue- a perfect character. In case you didn't know) To me when the characters spoke, ...

Very ... lovely. When I read this I felt like it should come later in the book, that is unless it's the base line for your book. What I want ...

Definitely Gale. I mean he went through so much. He loves Kat, but isn't sure what to think. He's not sure if Kat and Peeta are really together or what? ...

I guess this can go in the Fantasy collum. The first chapter isn't quite done, but I wanted to post it because I want to know what you think. A ...

Lovely! It made sense; it had the same continuing rhythm. Great job! I would put this poem down for a week or so. Then take it back up, reread it, ...

I just finished the book last night and I can't stop thinking about it! I cannot wait for the next book! I found the first book very boring until Part ...

Hum... I'll try and go easy on you. :lol: Here ane some things that caught my eye. He’s killed and hurt and tortured, But the gun is in your hand ...

When I fist started reading this a few things came to mind. *When your characters speak it seemed awkward. I suggest maybe going over it and making it seem more ...

Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix A rewritten tale from J.K. Rowling's Harry Potter Harry leaned in closer to Hermione's investigation of Professor Umbridge's interruption. "It means the ...