TheWordsmith

I could only find one mistake, as follows. "Shiny," the girl murmured, delighted by the gold ring she held in her hand. Otherwise, it was a good story. I especially ...

Did you know that the name/word "Ronan" means a warrior without a master? (think samurai without a damyo.) And I like the whole supernatural-powers thing... it may be because I ...

Go straight to the reaction, giving the explanation in bits as the MC finds out about it. (third person/first person) At least, that's how I would do it.

Port Angeles and the City of Forks, WA. Very interesting places. Big city nearby- Seattle.

Whoa. Cool concept. Now that I think on it, it does sound like The Giver, but that's not what I thought about first. Actually, the Utopia idea seems to becoming ...

Two words- junk writing. Just sit down and write whatever comes to mind. "My thumb hurts." "This is a stupid exersise." "Why did I ever listen to Wordsmith?" You know, ...

Oooh, my area of expertise. Forgive me if I rant. Yes, actually finding an agent is important but even more so is the dreaded query letter. Yikes ! is what ...

*searches for envelopes* Awesome.

For a name for her, if you don't have one already- maybe it would be better to have a name that doesn;t sound so tough, maybe that is misleading.

Could there be a little more info, please?

Oh. My. Gosh. *Gulps* They. Have. Got. To. Be. Kidding.

The Cirque du Soleil shows are amazing. I myself have watched Allegria, on DVD; La Nouba, on DVD; Ka Extreme, or the making of Ka, on DVD; and actually went ...

Or you could base your imaginary small town on a real one... There's also Maryville, Athens, and Sparta of TN. The last two have interesting names. :) Since they're in ...

Well, the story beginning was pretty good, but might not be toned down enough, depending on what the age of your audience is. Also, I did wonder why they were ...

The Ice Age was cold . Sorry, just had to get that out of the way. :D Besides Dire Wolves, there were woolly mammoths and saber-tooth tigers wandering around and ...