TheWalkinDude

You wonder why I am like this, Why I hide away my smiles, Why I hide away my tears, Why I don't trust you, Why I despite I think you ...

I might close my eyes, just for a minute, to dream. Liking this opening line. Very subtle, yet it made me wonder what you're talking about. It makes me want ...

Bullies They make your life hell, Which they think is swell. Very, very true. They think it's okay , To treat you like prey. They act oh so cool, Make ...

The lights twinkle through the window, welcoming me in. I like this opening stanza, yet at the same time I don't. It seems a little mundane and cliche to me. ...

Newly fallen snow Stretched across my garden . When I looked down, I don't think you need a comma here. It adds an unneeded pause below, I saw icicles harden. ...

Suicide I look at the small child before me, dead before his time had come. He looks up at me, “What happened?” I was confused at first at this stanza, ...

A child’s fear I am the monster under this child’s bed. I am his terror made into a reality. His fear creates me, even when it is hidden. Without him ...

Wow. Simply, wow. I feel like I can connect with this, as does everybody else who has commented, and I really feel you nailed a lot of the key points ...

I gotta say, nice job. This is a very nice story to get one in the mood for Christmas and it's written very well. I do understand that two others ...

In all truth, Delmarria, you're probably not missing much. I'll admit, I enjoy South Park as much as the next guy, but it's still rather IQ reducing...

Hahah! Must say, good show! I really like this story and think it's a very good one shot. Of course, there are problems here and there, but it would seem ...

I'm editing this for content, being that it went outside the guidelines of a review.

The Cold Quietly rising, through your body. Freezing your muscles, numbing, painful. You’re powerless. The feeling is sickening, but, you’ve felt it before. Waiting to lose this never won battle, ...

Okay, first off, I like the vagueness of this poem, and it's brevity. Very mysterioso, I would say. But, I will say it still has it's problems. The main problem ...

Thinking knowledge is a good thing is right, thinking you know more than anyone is wrong, I say this because poor me was too ignorant at the time to recognize ...