TheTruthLiesWithin

Hey Deadenedpulse :) Truth here for a quick review! Comments in bold, suggestions in red :) Once again my friend, W e find ourselves walking along our forgotten memories , ...

Hey :) The first one, I loved the concept but the lines of the perspective are a bit off, it's not really tri-dimensional. But since it's surrealism, I'll cut you ...

Hello Andysgirl :) I'm Truth and I'll review your post tonight. First off with the nitpicks That’s when she remembered the foreign man outside the door on the other side ...

AN: This is a short chapter on Matteo, kind of introducing his character. I'm not sure if it's a good idea to add another POV in the novel but.. you ...

Heyy Dread Father's greeting. Dread Father's blessing. We welcome you to our home. Our ranks are secret, S acred as we descend in to darkness As we To willfully leave ...

I love the idea that these are dolls, I don't think I've seen it before :) And I love that you arranged them in some interesting matter with backgrounds and ...

Hey Pink :) I see you've post on the forum haha. Well I am glad :) She 's gotten into a car accident and she’s pregnant,” she says with a ...

Hey there :) I'll make this short; corrections I suggest in red and comments in bold. Covered faces ; can't tell who is who. Impossible expressions you can not read. ...

Hey there Aqua :) Nice photographs here, I love the rain theme. I just always wish I could capture the fresh after-rain look like you did right here. The first ...

Hey there :) I'm Truth and I'll be reviewing this chapter tonight. I'll start with the least pleasant.. Nitpicks: The door swung open and Annie’s smile dropped , and brown ...

Hey, I'd have a chapter to review if you can. You don't necessarily have to read the whole thing to review the plot, just grammar and style would be great ...

Hey PaperCrane :) Nice poem here, it's really interresting. I love that it's different and, like you said, defies the rules of classic peotry. Below, I've put my suggestions in ...

Hello Kiki :) I'll review your poem for you. I thought our friendship was strong But I was all wrong I'm still young To understand what true friendship Really means. ...

Hey Wicked :) I love this piece, it's really flowy and awesome. I'll start with some things in noticed. “You may call my ‘my Lady’,” Allegra continued, “please, sit down.” ...

Hey Lauryn! So I'll review this poem of yours with my comments in bold and changes I suggest in red :) How many times can I look into your eyes ...