TheModernist

I didn't see any thread on here like this yet, so I figured I start one: Since we can all use a good laugh once in a while, it's nice ...

"Lost in a sea of infinite misunderstandings, Chained by childhood, Tantalized by adulthood, Which waves the key like a banner of uncertainty." Very well put. Definitely captured an emotion there: ...

I love short, concise, simple poems, but they have to be sharp either a rapier or a sledgehammer. Unfortunately, I didn't feel stabbed or pummeled. The first stanza is good, ...

First off, I'm just starting to play around with meter so I know it can be a challenge,but you did manage to achieve an admirable amount of rhythm with this ...

I agree with all the above posts which say that the poem is "choppy" and could benefit from a bit of punctuating, but I really like what you're trying to ...

Just out of curiosity, how many of you aspiring poets set or at least attempt to set your poems to a meter? How important do you think it is? And ...

First off, I like the theme. But the first stanza seemed a little estranged from the rest of the poem: "with a hunters weapons; bow and arrow. Mammouth skin and ...

This was really good. Normally i avoid poems on the longer side, but this one was gripping. For some reason it reminded me of something Johnny cash would have wrote. ...

I was a little confused myself, and I think I know why: my very first impression was that she was older, and that, in her younger years, she had been ...

That one by yeats was awesome.

This was cool, but vague, now vague is not bad, but this one may be a little too vague. There is a lot of room where you can place a ...

The message is really great. Isaac is right that the tone is neutral, as opposed to how emotional it could be, but I think it works. It's like this guy ...

This is a perfect example of where you set out to write something, to put a thought in words, and it just turns into a completely different thing on its ...

Very descriptive, but at the cost of fluidity: "Rain. It is so pure, so easy. It is motivated through its cycle and beautiful when it hits slippery puddles on the ...

First paragraph then the middle. I've been bamboozled too many times by a first line.