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Re: Quest for Purpose
Hi Jelen I know this is the barest of beginnings, but I have a few ideas up my sleeve. I just can't decide what I like best. As for the ...
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: Go to Hell (Part 1 of 2)
Hey Fir the longest time I told myself that comedies weren't my type of thing, but this is great. And like all great comedies, I see a layer of darker ...
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: Quest for Purpose
The young man appraised his reflection in the shot glass. The dim lighting of the bar blended the blotchy skin into one, somewhat appealing hue. His alcohol-based image sported an ...
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: Just The Life Of A Writer (Revised)
As I started to read this, the narrator says that it all began with an old liquor bottle. An alcoholic writer's story , I thought, Good, but not original. Sometimes, ...
Jul 11, 2011 -
Re: The night is always darkest before the dawn
Good morning Retro (or good afternoon, or evening, depending on when you read this) First things first: the title. The title is how a reader will first critique your work ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Black Sword
Hello Daniel I think that you ought to do something with this character. Just to see more ofthis world you have imagined would be nice. It seems like an RP ...
Jun 6, 2011 -
Re: Always and forever
Hello racingforever10, This is reall a good poem you have here! The emotion and diction match well. The ony thig hat caught mye ye as something you mght want to ...
Jun 6, 2011 -
Re: Bear, Swan, 1984
Hello Kylan For such a simple prompt, you've done well for yourself. It's not the direction I would have taken it, as it seems you chose to build metaphors instead ...
Jun 5, 2011 -
Re: Arachnophobia
Hello there This was a very good poem, giving me a feeling that spiders are bad despite the fact that I usually have no reservations against them. My favorite part ...
Feb 25, 2011 -
Re: Help Wanted
Good Morning, Ermixon, or Afternoon, or Evening, It has been a while since I have reviewed anything, so I thank you for writing something that caught my attention and warranted ...
Feb 23, 2011 -
Re: We Are Family~ The Apocolypse Ch. 3
And the Apocalypse continues! Hello again Panda, I'm here to review this latest piece. I like how you're switching POV's, first of all. This can be tricky, but in a ...
Feb 3, 2011 -
Re: We Are Family~ The Apocolypse Ch. 2
Good Morning, Panda. Or Afternoon, Evening, Night, whenever you happen to read this. When I first saw the title of this piece, I immediately went over to your portfolio and ...
Feb 2, 2011 -
Re: Do Not Cross Part 3
I know this is short, but it's an important transition piece. Enjoy, and comment as you like. The hovering lights that lined the streets cast odd shadows of a passing ...
Feb 2, 2011 -
Re: Medic Man
Hello there, I never could write a good action scene, and look what you've done here. That's not to say that your story was perfect, however, but it was better ...
Feb 2, 2011 -
Re: Tree of Vita (Part I)
I actually found a sort of charm in this style of writing. I must be frank: it was not terribly exciting, nor provocative, but there was something that made me ...
Jan 31, 2011
