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Ok, yeah sorry, I thought I got it, haha. Well, worth a shot I guess. Just let me know what exactly needs to be changed and I'll do so. Thanks ...

Yeah, you mentioned it, and I wasn't really going to make him succeed in any way at all. It just was in character for him to at least mention trying ...

This takes place right after Part 2 and concludes the play. (Back at the park. DMITRI is sitting on the bench with his head in his hands. After a moment, ...

This opening is very intriguing and I like the idea that it is actually written by the main character. That is something I personally enjoy doing in my own writing. ...

This continues right where the first part left off. (Scene opens at the park again. DMITRI is sitting on a bench waiting for someone while looking at a photo. After ...

This is a very interesting story! Well written and very detailed without it feeling like it was too much. You created a real living world, and that is very nice ...

Quick correction from the list of characters. Allikard is a light spirit.

First off, I must say that I did enjoy the script and it shows that you obviously know how to format it for actors and directors. While we are on ...

It's comments like that that makes me wish I found this website earlier! Thank you so much for your time on the review! Obviously I can't change much for this ...

*okay, here it goes* Allikard -- Fire light spirit The sudden release of energy from the Blood Tree's demise allowed Allikard to appear in a severely limited form to a ...

"It's one of those 'holy wars'," I said ignoring Maddox who has now been labeled as crazy by me, "the man I'm looking for is the self-proclaimed God of this ...

I looked at the dog -- Maddox was his name according to the other one -- and smiled. "Finally," I said, "some recognition! Maddox, was it? I am Vick. Vick ...

I look over at the frost and now spark lady, then over to the dog. They both ignored me... "Yeah I get it!" I announced to no one in particular, ...

I turned away from the frost lady to see that my coffee was now frozen. I swore loudly, "Please be careful! Some people have a caffein addiction here. Also, don't ...

Very interesting story! I was captivated straight from the beginning! One thing I should mention is right at the end. Where you said something to the effect of Rachel driving ...