TheForgottenAuthor

Hmmm...I agree with Matt. Especially about the last stanza...I don't get where that came from. It sounds more llike you didn't know how to end the poem, so tried to ...

Screams in the Night Part 1 Laughing faces swam into view; mocking, taunting. “Where’s your God now, little girl?” one of them cackled, raising a glass bottle above his head. ...

I hope you like this! Critiques Welcome! It all began when Angela Wilson was ten years old, in the warm and wet month of April. She lived with her grandfather ...

Yeah, I was going to say something about "closure" and "good-bye" and "We'll be together again soon", but I didnt want this to sound like an emo "I"m gonna go ...

this was pretty good! I only suggest that you use a bit more emotion in this. In my opinion, it seems a bit like you didn't really FEEL this when ...

This si pretty good! It just needs a little revision here and there, but other than that, this was really good! Keep it up!

Hmmm. This was pretty good, and I like the first stanza. But you really need to do some spell-check. And maybe add some stuff here and there. And in the ...

this was good! So true. But anyways, a little of it sounded a bit choppy, but other than that...good job!

I love this! It's so true!!! Oh, gosh. I love the way you quoted SP in the end...Oh my gosh this was awesome! Keep on wrtiting...you're really good!

this is a good poem, but it sounds a little emo-angsty for my taste. To make it a little better try re-phrasing some parts. Some parts we've all heard in ...

I LOVE the first stanza...that was great. But the last line of the second stanza: Where will we go and hide? doesnt really flow well with the rest of it. ...

How about "No More" as a title? Since this poem is about how you don't want any more... But anyways, this is a good poem! Keep it up!

You have a really good idea going! But I have to agree with Abbisnail.The problem is the: a) structure b) forced rhymes c) not enough detail! Sure, you've made it ...

I'm sorry, this may have a few cliches in it, and it took me a long time to write. I hope you like this, because it has genuine emotion. Critiques ...

thanks guys! I have some pretty good ideas in my head! Thanks again!