TheForgottenAuthor

I have some mixed feelings on this poem. You bring up some really good points, but the whole poem in general is really repetitive, which makes it kind of dull. ...

I think the title should be something along the lines of "Her Eyes" or something similar. I agree with lilc, you have some corrections to make, but once you fix ...

This was pretty good...There's nothing more to say, everyone has already said all of the things wrong with it, so I'm just going to say good job!

Sorry, this too is kinda short, but there is more coming! This is in the POV of Jake. I hope you like! Jake stuffed his books into his already overflowing ...

Thanks, guys! Actually, this scene in the story actually happened, and the teacher...that's her personality. I tried to channel her real personality into the story, it just made the story ...

Background of the story: This is about a dream my boyfriend had a while ago. The character Amelia is me Emily, Jake is Joel. This is the meeting of the ...

OH! Well I have heard of someone call teeth pearly whites, just not...pearls... Ok, I get it now!!! *laughs*

This was pretty good...I like this. But my question is... What do "bloody pearls" have to do with this? I mean, the whole "piercing pearls" thing confuses me. This was ...

Ummmmm... Ok, I'm going to be COMPLETELY honest. This poem really doesn't do much for me. It lacks the emotion that makes the reader relate PERSONALLY to the writing. The ...

:shock: Wow! I absolutely loved this! This has such power that it really got the point across to me. And this poem really stood out for me because I have ...

This was cool, but a big red EMO FLAG came up in my head while reading. And I have some critiques here, if you don't mind... The whole Eat this ...

I hope you like this, critiques MUCH needed as there may be some typos and misuse of grammar... Well, tell me what you think!!! *By the way* This is kinda ...

Hmmm, sorry to break it to you, but I really don't like this one! I mean, this could be considered "good", because you used standard conventions well, but I just ...

Thank you everyone! The "our" suggestion made a good point...and I had originally made it "the" but I wanted to make it sound like it was both his and my ...

I turn and see the look in his eyes, The words he speaks I can't deny. The world slows down, all is still, Our hopes and dreams we'll never fulfill. ...