TheEccentricScribe

Kirstybree: There is a fundamental difference between poetry and prose, and it's this. Writing a novel, or even a short story, is rather like driving a car. You may drive ...

Reading the first part, I felt like saying "Okay, I'll step here, but why am I doing so? To what purpose?" If I answered that question any more, I think ...

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Prologue: The Circle Through the treetops glistened brilliant rays from the moon and the countless stars. On the forest floor scurried a murmuring, shimmering stream filled with clear, cold water. ...

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As you know, poetry is not my area, so I am a poor critique when it comes to matters of style in the genre. As far as content goes, I ...

This needs a lot of work, if you want it to amount to anything. There's places where you confuse "there" and "their," and spots where you use "it's" where you ...

Thanks again for the review. I hope you've enjoyed Mercy; you've been the most faithful reviewer I've had, and I owe you much in return. Thanks for being so understanding ...

Thank you for your input, as per usual. It's always helpful. It is sometimes acceptable to replace an "and" with a comma. Personally, I prefer to avoid the conjunction when ...

Overall, I enjoyed the piece. The story is not self-assuming; it just kinda starts and keeps going. The prose is nice and clean-cut, without a whole lot of refinery. Mind ...

First paragraph, last two sentences, remove comma after "just." And, well she knew was pretty and easy target, so she needed to be careful. This attempt at an older linguistic ...

"Tarzin?" Tazin rolled his eyes at the nickname and grinned, then aped, yes, he thought, thinking himself very clever, aped an accent, "Me no Tarzin, me Jane!" Espona giggled and ...

As Tazin strolled out of Ashville High, elbowing his way through some flirting freshmen, he slipped on his sunglasses and stuffed his unopened report card into his backpack. He didn't ...

NAME: Tazin Miyamo AGE: 18 HEIGHT: 5’5” WEIGHT: 150 lbs. EYES: Brown HAIR: Black BUILD: Thin and deceptively small, but very toned EDUCATION: In his senior year at Ashville High ...

Yes, eyes can be trained. In this sense, trained is another word for "focused." I have "strategical" there, not "strategically." Repentance? Added, in the sense that, the soldier is adding ...