TheD2

Awesome, you were able to grab the attention of the reader right away, and were were able to hold it. Nice job. You did a nice job with the scenery, ...

You don't need to worry about your story being strange. There are many books that seem like they are jest the strangest things in the world, then you read it ...

That was vary nice, but as what was said before, that was like looking at a dictionary. Now I am one for good vocabulary, the bigger the words the better. ...