The-Phantoms-Thorne

That was a truly lovely piece of writing. I really felt for Susan. Thank you very much for sharing it with us.

My favourite passages in Chapter One is Jekyll's nightmare and his subsequent journal entry: It wasn't long before Jekyll had plunged himself into a deep sleep to escape the ill ...

The salt spray from the choppy waters stung the pale cheeks of the painfully thin and haggard gentleman who stood hunched over the railing of the cargo ship powering through ...

Al sat back and offered his employer a warm smile. “I was wondering when you would ask me about that, sir. Truth be told, my name was supposed to be ...

I think you did Misa very well (I love Death Note... thank you Brisbane Anime Society!). She really is a little nutty about Light, but you're right. Very self-assured. For ...

A couple of typos here and there, more of an oversight than anything else. Is this just a short piece, or is there more to it? Imagery is good, very ...

I read all the way through your profile and the first thing I notice is that your signature is from Doctor Who! Says a lot, really... Level six piano, really? ...

Hi there, Angel! Most of my fanfics, including my Doctor Who ones, are over at under the pen-name of Lina-Baggins, I believe. I have a few completed CI ones, though. ...

Since my learned friends above have given you a thorough breakdown of what you need to fix, I will just give you my perspective. I'm not sure, but have you ...

Albeit, the fact this has 'Crawford' in the title, then followed up with the word 'angel' in the first sentence had me interested (by the way, is the references to ...

As Christiana rested her head against the Phantom’s velveteen lapels, inhaling his subtle scent of damp sandalwood, she closed her eyes and listened, allowing him to move her in steady, ...

To Dance the Path of Darkness Christiana scratched and twisted, scrabbled and bit at the iron grip on her wrist. But resistance was futile; the man who had snatched her ...

Thanks guys, this is really helping! ^_^ As far as developing magic, few characters are able to develop mage abilities beyond one or two abilities. Most are able to shape-shift, ...

Oooh, Demeter... for the simple sake of being charming, I'm not going to bestow my opinon as to Gerard Butler's abysmal take on the role. Oops. ^_^ Ah, I'm a ...

I quite liked this. You characterised well, spelling and grammar was good, would have liked more input from Martha. Perhaps the Doctor noticing that she was a little more quite ...