ThanatosPrinciple

Hilarious. I like how they hunch over, throughout the cartoon. My favourite part is when he's at the podium. It doesn't have any plot, and makes little sense in the ...

BenedictionofGrace, I don't think it would matter much if it was you or I who got 'aborted'. Think about it this way: the baby hasn't even been fully developed anyhow. ...

10:00 p.m. New Jersey The astrologer stared in utter silence, eyes wide and erratic in motion. His hands slipped as they found the camera button. He shifted the telescope to ...

I thought most of it was very awkward...sure, it was generally well-written. However, I think it needs to be revised a bit. When there is dialogue in the story, for ...

Very well written. It's a little slow in the beginning, with Jess just standing there in the rain, waiting to die from hypothermia and thinking about her family. There were ...

It's a very interesting story. It's got a southern swing to it, too. I think you should try to bring out the plot more than you already have. Become more ...

Actually, it IS an information sheet! I had to write this for Social Studies, so all the numbers, endless facts and others seriously need to be edited out!

I knew somewhere on this website there had to be some SERIOUS writing! I really thought that there were only the small little posts that barely contained any GOOD writing. ...

There's a serious amount of proper spacing that needs to get done. I find it hard to critique when it's all in a huge, menacing mass.

How do you design this stuff in the first place?

This is the beginning of a series that questions our existence, our rights, and all other aspects of the world we have wrought from the void. Where did ‘existence’ come ...

You seem fairly new, and at YWS we have a 2-1 posting ratio. For every two reviews, you post some of your writing. More people will review and critique your ...

It's very well written, though in some places the dialogue is a little slow. It sometimes doesn't have anything to do with the plot at all. Also you might think ...

I know I originally wanted to write a story, but I also wanted to use emoticons... and this is the result.

Contains guns: :smt068 Contains swordfighting: :smt027 Contains other violence: :smt075 Contains various forms of torture: :smt064 Contains abusive language: :smt014 , :smt084 Contains graphic nudity