ThanatosPrinciple

Okay, some civil language please. But seriously, theres no point in capital punishment, because, in a way, the victims are getting off pretty easy compared to what could be inflicted ...

What about the people who make the porn movies? They should be included in the debate.

This debate is a real void... for one we can't prove that god exists...and everyone is being so civil...

This is a no-brainer. If they arent happy living together, then leave.

I'm pro life too, but it should be the mother's choice, not anyone else's. If the mother's life is in danger, it's best to safe at least one life, don't ...

I think home schooling is alright through the lower elementary grades, but its not a good idea through highschool. I would hate to be homeschooled my whole life and then ...

Whoa. I'm really spooked. That was really powerful. Ugh. She must have a really religious family, I guess. Anyway, I couldn't really find anything worth shredding, so I'm going to ...

This is really simple writing, which is good. It makes the story really good, taking into account that you're able to create an interesting environment and a fascinating character...all which ...

I really expected this story to be a stereotype. Well done! You were able to inject personality and denial into your character! That's a real significant sign of a good ...

OK, whoa. There's a lot of information flying through the reader's head in the first paragraph. I'm still reeling from it. Ok, you NEED to cut back on that. Plus, ...

I agree with VampireBloodrace. You should revise that. YWS is kind of messed up with paragraphs, so it would be great if you were to space things out a bit. ...

Ok, first off, never ever be scared to post things. Especially if they're as good as this one. That's what we're all here for. Anyway, so far so good. Try ...

Gosh, it's hard to critique these. Ok, great story. Very exotic. I like how Carson is kind of simple and then he meets "the one", who happens to be a ...

That may be true, but babies aren't entirely sentient beings when they're in the womb. They're just little sea monkeys. That may seem REALLY cruel hearted, but in a way, ...

Sorry everyone. I just realized. There's part of this story that won't make sense: aka the part with the guy and the lightning bolt. Sorry. This story may be continued, ...