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Personally, from the examples you've given, I don't get the 1950s Dad impression. Phrases like 'that was the old me,' and 'once a childhood friend' feel a little out of ...

Could you copy/paste a few examples?

Review Templates Reviewing can be really tough at times, so I conjured up a few templates to try out as a baseline until you adopt your own style of reviewing. ...

I tend to think of the longest, most awkward thing I could feasibly fit onto the front cover and go with it. People don't usually like my titles, but I ...

I love the idea of an evil villain using light magic. You could go for something cosmic, like Meteor, which can be a bright and very destructive thing if it ...

Enoch and Elijah- Two biblical figures who 'were taken by God', which means technically their bodies were never found. Sparticus- Led an army of escaped slaves against Rome. It was ...

I'm not too experienced in ASL but I might be able to offer something? I second T-rex as a name for a dragon. Dragonfly could also work if you sign ...

Anytime =]

I checked my knowledge on Passive Sentences and took a look at the original chapter. ' Her eyes are red from crying earlier... ' Here I think the issue is ...

Apricity wrote an article/thread on prologues here . Rosendorn's advice on what counts as a prologue might be of particular use. I wouldn't say get rid of the text itself ...

Hi Maxgaan, welcome to YWS! If you want detailed critique or feedback you can post in the literary forums via the Publishing Centre, (link up top.) This is well formatted, ...

Having read a few snippets of your work over time, I don't think you're at much of a loss as far as quality is concerned, your writing is really good. ...

I don't really have time to take on a co-writing project at the moment, but I could recommend Angela's Ashes by Frank McCourt as a famous work of reference that ...

@Holysocks Maybe the fact that I thought the first made more sense is part of it =p It's not really something I think personally, but it's the crux of the ...

So the problem I have is that there are too many ideas to fit into a short space, and I end up cramming them all in, landing me with a ...