User avatar

Temi

  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Lesson in Breaking

    Wow! I am really awestruck by the power that resonates from this poem. It's hit square in the face and left me smiling foolishly. The voice was awesome. It had ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Outside your window

    I know a place. It’s just outside your window, With mesmerising beauty; You can’t begin to fathom. In this place, Are our people; With skins, That glistens in the sun. ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Memory of Sorrow

    I tremble, When that memory, Comes knocking, At the windows of my soul. That memory, Of my ancestors; With pain, Stuck on their ebony skins. They scream, When another lash, ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Primitive Things Evolve

    It's different. From the voice; to the imagery; to the poetic diction ; to the tone and mood. It's defintely different. I can't really say why but maybe that's the ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Welcome to the Dark

    Nice poem! First of all the voice in this piece is the most powerful. It was solemn and it had a hint of solitude. I also love your poetic diction. ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: You died, tonight.

    Well... That was different. It wasn't poetic in anyway (in my opinion). But, on the other hand, It was funny and witty. Nice one!

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Come and Set me Free

    Nice poem! I love the voice. It was solemn, strong and it made the reader want to believe the predicament you were in. I also love the tone and mood. ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Still and Forever

    I love this poem! Especially the rhyming. It gave a really powerful effect to the poem. I also love the voice. It was solemn, harmonious, peaceful and it had a ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Breaking Me

    Wow! I can't actually believe you said this wasn't one of you best pieces! I could only gaze in awe at the way you mastered your words in this poem. ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Listen

    Wow! This is really nice! It seems as if you just poured out words on paper. Although the theme of the poem is kind of cliche, you expressed in a ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: The Painting Dies

    Nice poem! I love the voice in this piece. It seemed as if it suddenly spilled out of your soul! In my opinion, I also think it had kind of ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Burning Candle and the Moon *edited*

    Hey! You've got a nice poem! I love the voice and the imagery. It's keeps the reader stuck to the words wondering how it's going to end. It's not hard ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Don't Mistake This Smile

    Nice poem! I love the poetic diction because it was quite explantory. I also love your voice. It had a hint of defence in it! Keep it up!!

    Apr 19, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Devil's Playhouse

    I know a school. It lurks around the corner. With capturing beauty on the outside; That grapples on the souls of men in the inside. In this school, Lives a ...

    Apr 19, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Thoughts of a Compulsive Liar

    I love this piece cause it's funny and witty. The diction was self-explantory making the reader understand the piece. Nice one! Keep it up

    Apr 16, 2011


how insane i exist in rooms i'm not in at the moment
— fatherfig