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Re: The Last Hour
Temijuopelo Alufa Pain is just a feeling Death is just a phase Your life bound By the shackles of ignorance A fragrance of evil The pungent smell of good Coated ...
Dec 10, 2011 -
Re: The Well of Knowledge
Hi there! I like this a lot. It made a lot of sense. The word choices were spot on, depicting very sensuous imagery of the message you're passing across in ...
Oct 4, 2011 -
Re: Rhythm
HI there! The poem is a good one but I would have to agree with Tayla. I couldn't quite get the theme of the poem. Despite that, The imagery is ...
Oct 4, 2011 -
Re: Itna-tsirhc
T.J. Alufa This poem is very different from my other poems. I am truly scared that I created something like this. It goes against the main theme in most of ...
Sep 17, 2011 -
Re: Insanity is not the end
Hi there! This was a good piece. I like the fact that the theme of your poem is controversial (in my opinion.) I love your word choice and diction; it ...
Sep 17, 2011 -
Re: Forlorn
This, Baron is flawless! From the very first words to the last. You took a cliche topic and told it in a distinct and remarkable way. Your word choices have ...
Sep 17, 2011 -
Re: Waiting
Hello. I love this piece, it was short and witty. I love your word choice, to me it sounded playful and vibrant. Although in my opinion, there wasn't much imagery. ...
Sep 16, 2011 -
Re: Portrait of a Healing Heart
Interesting. This piece strangely aroused my curiosity of the type of person you are. It made me question what kind of mind you truly possess. The diction sounded antique. I ...
Sep 16, 2011 -
Re: Graves
Hello there! Although Lumi, as mangaged to give you some tips on almost all the elements of the poem, I felt compelled to share my opinions with you. Here we ...
Sep 16, 2011 -
Re: Something Different
T.J. Alufa It’s funny! My so-called love Now a figment Of my imagination. It was right in front of me Glaring at me God! I could even Grab it. But ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: The Expiration Date
Hello! I haven't got much to say, the first review was quite good, but I felt I should say something when I read the poem. Here we go. This was ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: in a paper bag
Hey Percy! I would like to review this. Here we go. First of all your diction. It was simple and understandable which makes it easy to read thereby giving a ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: The Forest
T.J. Alufa Can you feel it? That solemn heart beat A beat that pulsates Through the veins of our aging trees Making them dance to the voice of the mountains. ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: The Hurricanes are Beautiful
Wow! Skins, you my friend possess a raw talent, a dark flame burns inside you and you seem to kindle it with insomnia. This was great. Your diction was simple ...
Sep 8, 2011 -
Re: Victims of fear
Part 1 It all began in the night, with a single scream. A scream of fear; the fear of the death. I was in my room, sleeping, my sister also ...
Sep 7, 2011
