TellATaleForTwo

Ok, i liked this a lot! You could tell it had a lot of meaning and depth behind it, but I think you went a little too fast. The ending ...

Ok, this chapter does need a bit of work. You're right about that, but, you are wrong that its too much info all at once. i think the pace you ...

Sorry it took so long for me to comment! Its a rare thing for me to be around a computer these days. Well, the story is great as always! cant ...

This is really good Matt! This is my favorite part: Chorus: Fire, spread across the land Fire, held inside my hand Fire, bringing light to dark Fire burn, the inner ...

umm, as far as pointing out the bad goes, im good. I thought this was really good! will you posting any more? i would like to read more about this ...

er... there is nothing to critique(not that i see anyway). all i can say is i want more! lol *siits and waits* ~Tina

I agree with SK, all you really need to do is work a bit on your word choice, spelling, and grammer. Overall it was pretty good! I'll be looking for ...

this is good Nick! though it still kind of reads like a letter or something. I think you just need to learn how to pick and choose your words a ...

well, this is much better than the last couple things you posted. watch out or you may get booted from the site. just a friendly warning. ~Tina

She decided to wake Maviance and have her accompany her downstairs, change her to him other than that, it was awsome! Once again your vocabulary amazes me! Which makes the ...

I like this Luna! there were only three things that bothered me: One that guarded the rotting body of a young woman nary eighteen who had died upon giving birth ...

*twitch* twitch* lol that was really good! a few grammatical errors and some (small) things that im kinda confused about, but that's probably just me so i'll talk to you ...

As bob says, no need. If you don't have anything constructive to bring to the table, don't comment -- laugh to yourself.

lmao, the idiot that clicked on http://www.pathetic.com>>>>>>> ME... XD

:shock: lol... umm... ok....... :roll: :)