TedusCloud

I thank you all for your great critiques :) Also I would like to tell you the novel in its current entirety (yet unfinished) is in the Advanced Critiques forum ...

Thank you all for your comments and for your time and dedication to review my work :D At the moment the piece of work is still unfinished I'm definitely almost ...

And here's the 3rd part of the review :D

Ah finished reviewing part II. Everything is in here.

Thankyou so much for your in-depth critiques. Just a few things which perhaps I could have informed better. The prologue is narrated in 3rd person by a character who hasn't ...

Review of I ~ The Beginning. The plot is enthralling I'll give you that. A typical Fantasy story, but gripping nonetheless. Perhaps the language is a bit too colloquial at ...

Haha the talent here is amazing. Well done on that fantastically written piece, just a few problems. There's too much dialogue in it. And the thoughts count as dialogue also. ...

Well I thought I should just post all 9 Chapters I have till now. Synopsis: The world is ended. Few have transcended the end of the world, and all of ...

For some reason the italics don't seem to be working well. So I put this all in code form so you all can see the tags and note accordingly which ...

This is quite a good piece of writing. It was short, sweet and to the point. Other than a few nitpicks pointed out earlier by other reviewers, I would say ...

Well first off the plot is very enthralling. What I cannot understand is why you called the land Avalon. Is this based on Arthurian legend? Beware of Arthurian names such ...

Thanks for your wonderful critique. I have taken all of it to heart and want to adjust accordingly :D I did notice my sentence structure is a bit off here ...

Mine would definitely have to be "The Divine Conspiracy" by Epica. Nothing gives me more inspirational juice than that. So bombastic *begins to drool*.

Let me comment on the plot. It's very mysterious and I'm very intrigued by how it's going to continue. What I would say is that the flow is sometimes jarred ...

Wow. This poem is the stuff greatness is made of. I greatly appreciate the honesty of it. It is raw, it is powerful. I love that you used an epigraph ...