Teardrop

Hi! Teardrop here! First of all, I think you really need to divide this up into more paragraphs. When you start dialogue, when a new person talks, you make a ...

Hey, Teardrop here! My nitpicks, and details are in the spoiler. Mistakes are highlighted in red! Comments are in bold! Three A Small Blue Book Heavy breathing and a crash ...

Hey, I'm Teardrop and I'll be reviewing this today. First of all, I thought this was interesting, and a good start to a novel. As the air of the afternoon ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS, I'm Teardrop! You like horror? I love horror, whatever I write happens to come out as somewhat like horror, or something like that. It's my favorite ...

15. As days and nights passed, I knew that this wouldn't last, us being together. I see the way you smile, I know it's going to be a while, Until ...

11. Note: It's like A Haiku or something! XD Can we stop a while, until the blade is dropped, And I'll show a smile? 12. Dear Me, Sometimes I find ...

Hey, Teardrop here! Okay, this really lacks emotion. Also, you need punctuation in it when people speak. Here's the nitpicks, added stuff and corrections in red . Hey guys. this ...

Hey, Teardrop here! First of all, this coud have used punctuation and capitilization. Also, it could have been divided into stanzas, with ellaboration. as heartful as the tin man Would ...

Woah I wrote this a long time ago, I've forgotten about it. ^__^ Thanks for the review!!

Hey, Teardrop here! First of all, nice poem and I'm so sorry for your loss! :( I think you might want to add punctuation to your poem. . It's short, ...

Mhmm... ^.^

--I need to update this. ^.^ 6. Just Fine I've let you know, I've stuck around, I've fallen far behind. That pain I needed, That bliss I fought, has been ...

Cassie Across the street, I spotted a small forest, a couple trees were torn down, but it seemed to be deserted as of right now. "How about the forest?" I ...

Cool. Where are we going next, for shelter? ^_^

4. The Darkest Way Why do we chase after the hardest things to hold on to, Is it the smile? The laugh? The eyes? Or is it something different dark ...