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‘Brain Damage, that’s awful Kayla. How did she get brain damage? I mean cancer can’t directly cause that can it?’ My stomach churns. ‘Well, her mum told my mum that ...

I agree complealty that it is to rushed but this piece of writing was for my writing course so I was restricted to 500 to 600 words which is not ...

I love my father but I wasn’t aware of just how much until one day he disappeared and I was left alone with my fifteen year old sister. My sister ...

Monica opened her mouth to speak but quickly closed it again at the sight of Mr Brennan’s eyes. He wasn’t a man to cross. Some students swore that he sometimes ...

Thanks I'll take that on board i see what your saying.

I opened the shutters of my thirty year old beach house soaking up the smells and the scenery and the memories the good and the bad. I hadn’t been there ...

The cell was cold and damp. Freedom seemed such a long way away. Lucius longed to be free to enjoy the winter like the rest of the world to ski ...

I will never forget that moment that I watched those two cars collide almost becoming one, they could have been one if it weren’t for the fact that they where ...

One word wounderful not much more to say I couldnt find a fault well done.

I like it an interesting idea.

Thanks guys much appreciated.

Here's the start of one of my stories. More to come. ************************************************************* The hallway was silent. Come to think of it the whole house was silent. And this star

Beyond fantastic, you write beyond your age. I loved the imagry it made the story come alive. I was on the edge of my seat. keep writing your going to ...

As I tried to run my legs shook beneath me. From behind I heard terrified screams and a series of bangs before I turned and headed down a long dark ...

Powerful piece, really drew me in. I couldn't find any flaws so thats why this critique is so short. Congratulations on creating such a good read.