Tatra

You asked me to review this post, so I shall review this one. I did read over the previous parts, to get an idea of the story. :D So far, ...

Finally getting around to reviewing this, :D . Another interesting chapter, revealing more of the predicament that Alicia has found herself in. Being kidnapped by a troublesome, mischievous sprite is ...

You could even add writing prompts to the speed writing. Have people speed write to the topic of something random. Make it a fun place to be, where people can ...

I like the addition of the sprite, Faeries are always interesting. Especially a sociopath. I like it. I would suggest slowing down a little, allowing the character to get her ...

Happy Birthday!! :smt041 :birthday: :smt113

I think this is the start of a very interesting story, especially with how it ended. Makes me wonder what's going to happen to her, and why her father was ...

I think you could also get away with describing the character like one would in a third person POV, letting the description slip through with actions. Like, in third person ...

Okay, first of all I really only scanned the last two chapters. And, I do have to say that you might get more critiques, and possibly better ones, if you ...

You might be able to pick up a few tips over at Script Frenzy's site. Although, Script Frenzy was back in April, so the forum's a little slow. There should ...

This is a very interesting story. The characters are very mysterious, and draws one into the story. It's very hard to keep straight each of your characters, I keep getting ...

What you need to do is to add in the action around the character's dialogue, describing what actions the characters are doing while they are talking. That way, you still ...

This is the kind of work that really drags a person in, especially with how real it is. I couldn't stop reading once I started. I love all of the ...

I agree with writing everything that you come up with down. That way you can piece together your ideas, and figure out which ones would fit best with the story ...

Hello! I've read your story, and I think it's very interesting. It definitely makes me curious and wanting to read more. Especially at the end, where you can just tell ...

Hello, I'm Tatra. Just joined today, but already I think this is a cool place. Found this place by the way of Saint Razorblade. I've been writing for several years ...