Tamora

Hey there! I sort of got bullied into joining. lol. not that I'm complaining, I like the idea of co-writing and I know of plenty of good authors who have ...

Keleria Crouching outside the window Keleria listened intently to what Athene and Nicholas were saying. She was shocked to find out that they hadn't seen each other before, she thought ...

Keleria let out the breath she'd been holding. They hadn't recognised her. They would have called her if they had. Surely. She wasn't sure if she was relieved or not, ...

Keleria ran hard for a long time, wanting to get rid of the look in Moira's eyes, but no matter what she did it wouldn't leave her mind. Finally she ...

Wow!! This has changed so much! I'm not sure if I prefer it this way though, I think you could show the ideas easier when it was more real. Bringing ...

This is an interesting idea, and well executed. I like it! The other two have picked out the grammar and speeling things, so I'll cut straight to the story line ...

I realsie that it isn't poetry as the others have pointed out, but I'll still crit it, as I think it's worth it. This actually has some nice moments in ...

This is my first poem, and I wrote it really quickly, and spontaneously, but if I hadn't I don't think I would have got the same feeling across, but I ...

lol, this is a good idea! hmmm... I'll probably say that all those stupid self-assesment activities are pretty lame, they make absolutely no sense! I actually don't know how they ...

"What do you think you'll find?" Moira had reacted badly to Keleria's desicion to pack up and move on, but Keleria thought she was doing the right thing, no one ...

I'm going to look at this as a teacher would, or at least, I'll try to. lol, I don't how I'll succeed. They were tiny mirrors that fell, cracked, and ...

Keleria Frowning, Keleria looked at the shapes created by the stones she had thrown. the patterns confused her, and she struggled to interpret their meanings. Maybe Moira's right, I do ...

Keleria Crawling beneath the shrubs Keleria, her hands tenderly holding the pouch out in front of her, approached the clearing silently. Before she left her safe hiding place she looked ...

This is really good! I like the ideas that you've brought to light, and the way you've incorporated them all into the simple act of eating an apple. Very inventive. ...

I love Monty Python!! I realise that you're not the same as the greats, so this is really not bad. the Black Knight was difinitely my favourite part of the ...