Tamora

*Yay, i hope this continues for a while, it's great!* Keleria Keleria blanched. She stared at Rydia in absolute shock, then glanced around quickly for someone to step in and ...

I really enjoyed this although I agree wihth alot of what Suzanne said, the repetition got a bit weary and the ending wasn't strong enough. But the metaphors were great! ...

It's simple economics, time, skills, and money. Why spend time on cooking a meal, when you can buy fast food? Why learn how to cook a meal, when there are ...

Keleria They've found me. That's what I wanted, isn't it? Her angry burst had simmered down, boiling slowly underneath her skin, the heat of her flames showing through. But how ...

Round and round the mulberry bush, The mulberry bush, The mulberry bush. Here we go round the mulberry bush On a Sunday morning Bright colours flash before my eyes; a ...

Thank you!! I always miss-use semi-colons. I'm so glad that you gave me that site, that's really helped.

I decided I wanted ot do a story about music, but I haven't decided on a name yet, that'll come later. this is just the start, I've still got to ...

I go to church every sunday (i'm in the music group), and for some reason, it makes me question Him more than it makes me believe anything. Everytime I go ...

Hiya barbie. Hi Ken! Wanna go for a ride? Sure Ken! Jump in! Listening to the high pitched singing by Aqua, I try to concentrate on Mrs McGee's homework assignment; ...

I am a cursed one. Like flames that lick my wooden soul They taunt me cruelly. They whip me, and hurt. Bright red sparks come from my fiery back, The ...

I really, really like this. don't be disgusted! there are some good moments in this, and the clicheiness makes it fun to read and interesting. I like this alot. You've ...

Keleria woke up crying. Shocked and ashamed at herself she quickly crossed to the basin and washed her face, but she couldn't wash away the memory of the dream. Moira's ...

the half heart is affective, but apart from that, i didn't really like it, no offense. You need some more metaphors or interesting sentences. The ideas however are good, i ...

*sniff* This is so sad! I know what exactly what you mean. It's so pointless! There're only a couple of things that need changing, and they're mainly small things. I ...

This is really quite a good start, and introduces what I'm guessing is going to be the main plotline for the story well. there ae a few things though that ...