TamaraGoesRawr

This is really good, but you had a few mistakes with your apostrophes. Like. "Thief's" should have been "Thieves". But good job other wise, keep writing. [:

I like the fantasy feel of this poem, I can't find anything wrong with it, really.

I love the mental images this gave, and how the first sentance made me want to keep reading. There's really nothing wrong with this, except maybe how you spaced it. ...

I like how it flowed, and they way you used the words. I'm not a Christian, but I could keep reading this over and over again. Good job.

This is really good. But you had a small mistake with capitals on the line where it says " cause you don't even know why you stay"; it's just minor. ...

The overall mood and meaning of this poem is really good, however I don't agree with how you broke it up. I found it was a harder to read than ...

It was good. Maybe just try to break the sentances up a bit more, to make it easier to read.

Don't cry, tears of steel Sometimes it's better not to feel Don't cry, wipe your eyes Just remember all the lies Don't cry, let it out In a red river ...

I like this, it reminds me of a song I know and gives me some really good mental images. I think it's fun and has a good mood behind it.

This is relatable to many teens I think, and it captures alot of feelings that people probably share. I like how you simply stated the facts and the truth. There's ...

I like the mental images the poem created and how you worded it, though maybe try making it a bit longer.

I love how this got me thinking about questions I never would have thought about. The big words make it sound very professional. Honestly I could read this five times ...

The imagination in this poem is amazing and very creative. There isn't much you can fix, I don't think. But on some lines I think you need to add maybe ...

I really liked this. I liked all the details and the last line really gave it some tension. You might want to try and make it a bit shorter though, ...

Overall I liked it, but I have a suggestion for one line. The line where you say " I wouldn't go" try replacing it with something like "I'd never go", ...