Talulahbelle

Thanks for this smashing info. My english teacher just gave me info on another one. Write an essay about The Fountainhead by Ayn Rand. Due in April 2010. I can't ...

Hey guys! Part two time, lets see how this goes. Please be honest, even brutally if need be. I need all the help I can get. And what do you ...

I love the idea of this story but it does need some more...umph! I think I didnt get connected to Alicia. She needs more personality, I think. I won't say ...

I liked it, but then again I enjoy anything about theives. The one main problem I had was the characters. I think you should spend more time giving them depth. ...

Sorry about putting this is the wrong place. Sometimes I get so confused around here! Alas... Thanks so much! Spire is perfect, me thinks. I can't tell you how grateful ...

I have this stubborn character that refuses to be named. He's a king and very opinionated. He has strong views about kingship and puts too much pressure on his son ...

This is just a wonderful piece. It draws the reader in immediately and I already feel so attached to this character that I havent really even met yet. Could you ...

I love this story (I'm all into birds right now)! Umm...I noticed only a few things... The conversation. There are times when you get into just he said she said. ...

Hello, I've never done this before so...sorry. Unfortunately I have no idea how to put a link in this here message, so... in Fantasy fiction, 'October'. I completely understand if ...

I have a Sebastiene and I always think of him as really sweet. Like Bastion in Never Ending Story (Is that the movie I'm thinking of?) or Sebastion in The ...

Okaly dokaly...I'm sure you guys are tired of answering my questions, heck I'm tired of seeing my name everywhere! But I've got another one...ready? How do I get more people ...

Okay, I'm going to tell you something that these fine young writers have tried to pound into my own skull... SHOW DON'T TELL! When you have too much narration readers ...

I'm SO SORRY! I had no idea that it was so loooonnnnggg! Now I know... :thud:

"You’ve got to be kidding me.” October groaned aloud as she stood in the courtyard of Young High amongst dozens of happy families. How could she have forgotten Parents’ Day? ...

You're a little long winded. Cut out some of the overdone adjectives and shorten some sentences. It takes a lot of energy to read this and I just don't have ...