Talking_Pinata

Incredibly smooth writing, not a cliche subject, everything here is wonderful! I envy your talent at writing narrative poetry. I really, really do. GOLD STAR FOR YOU!

I guess I should explain myself. As I wrote what is now chapter 2, I realized that I really do need this story to be in 3rd person. Too many ...

I have officially discovered the lyrics forum! This is wonderful! Very nice song! Kudos to a job well done!

THis is nice but not that complex of writing. Such as "super nice couches". I understand that this may just be the character's way of describing the couches, but I ...

I agree, it is slightly hard to read but after reading it a few times I have to say it is very deep. Cassandra says that it is a cliche ...

THis is really nice. I wish it wasn't your only poem. The emotion and indirectness is nice and the slight confusion it provides keeps my attention wonderfully. Kudos to you.

This is a really nice poem, but I do believe you could expand upon it and make it even better. What I saw here was very creative and awesome though.

Yes. It is the future of the world. -____- Great poem, I loved it.

People are confused about this? Wow. I thought it was a rather brilliant play on depression. Good job. The only problems I saw were grammatical and spelling and people have ...

Lovely piece, really. I had a few really nice "Aw" moments here and there. I especially love the way they describe things to one another. Not simply, but with a ...

Look who found you! That's right, the kid from deviantart! Once again, nothing I can see wrong here! And the spacing is nice too! -_^

I agree. This poem is rather funny and you smile. But then, as you read on you realize just how hard it is on the person and how much they ...

Thankyou everyone! I like the spacing (sorry) so I'm keeping it, but I appreciate the compliments!

Wow. I get the joke. Wow. And then it turns out to be they're working on the car. Wow.

All these poets and fiction authors ever write about is love. Poems about love are cliché, but then again, poems about how cliché love is, they’re cliché. Could it be ...