Talking_Pinata

GAH. HUGE mistake here guys. NUMERO UNO: I forgot to add in something that'd help you know that the police officer didn't kill Iliad! DX He was handed back to ...

Thankyou for the comment! I'm VERY happy for the kind compliments!

MOSTLY, I'm looking for grammatical errors as well as emotions. The emotions I (tried to) convey are: -Horror at the camp -Hopelessness, or sadness as Iliad dies. Please comment!~

Iliad turned from Samson, running away as quickly as he could. “Iliad!” Samson cried out, worry and frustration dictated his voice, “Iliad where do you think you’re going?!” “I’m leaving

Thankyou! I appreciate the praise. And yes, I've found myself wishing the same thing every once in awhile.

Thankyou everyone and I will be contemplating the beginnning of it in deeeeep thoughts.

Thankyou for the reviews! I appreciate all the praise more than you can imagine!

Wow. Thankyou!

Shame POSSESSES ME! I MISSPELLED the TITLE! DX *edits it* And yeah. That time with the "Little Raven Black" was on purpose.

Thankyou for the critique! It has been very helpful and I've edited the poem as you pointed out my grammar and capitalization issues.

Unlike the above review, I am no lover of Simon Cowell. But I think I'm becoming him (doing all these reviews in one day). There was no emotion in this ...

I agree. Simple. and it conveys a message. but. -I agree with the others, the paragraphs need to have spaces inbetween -a couple spelling mistakes can be taken care of ...

Oh. And dont has a ' between the n and the t as well so it looks like don't

Lets see. First things first. Clean up the spelling and grammar mistakes! Cant needs a ' between the n and the t so it looks like can't uve is spelled ...

I love the hair and the pose of the smaller pic! Good job!