Talking_Pinata

Thankyou! Everyone! I've done my best to edit it in the ways I saw fit! I'm eagerly awaiting more reviews! ^^

AH! Everyone! This is supposed to be attatched to the "Yarn-prologue" Me: -___- attacking Mr. Duckworth was self defense of my writing, this is not yet a good working piece ...

Wow. Just. Wow. Genius again my good friend. Genius again. Only a COUPLE things in the last paragraph where letters are missing. Other than that. Just. Wow. Genius again.

Its very entertaining to watch Maki-chan as she DESPERATELY tries to make people stay away from her old writing. I'm probably not helping, but I'll do my best and say ...

I'm VERY sorry for bumping this, I'm hoping for some more grammatical reviews (as well as overall) but mostly grammatical.

Wow. Thumbs up. You've got me hooked. Grammar mistakes have seemingly been taken care of. Thumbs up again, I actually was drawn in a read the whole thing, which is ...

As I said in my above post, some awkwardness, and I'll point those out to you as well as other grammatical mistakes. 1. You don't need to repost the title, ...

1) Yes. The personification fits wonderfully 2) By the time you mentioned a "cap" and the button being pushed, I knew it was a camera, you might do well making ...

Thankyou! I'll be looking into that >_> . Just gotta figure out HOW to do so.

Thankyou! Don't forget to look for grammer mistakes! They're very helpful X3

By what you think I mean: 1. Did it catch your attention? 2. How is the character development going, however short 3. Other thoughts. THANKYOU AGAIN AND SORRY FOR BUMPING!

Aw.........................*sniffle* That was deep. Only one thing to pick about. The punctuation on (at LEAST) the last line of a stanza should be a period. Aw....

I think its a good idea, but I agree with the others as well: it is a little rough. Read it aloud to yourself and you'll know some things that ...

Sorry for the inconvienience

So sorry for bumping it. DX I'm unsatisfied with these reviews considering I edited it.