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  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Little Monkey

    I disagree. I like the anonymous person being ... well... anonymous. This is a short piece, but I like it a lot none the less. Drawing it out, though, might ...

    May 2, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Untitled..

    Trees can whistle, I assure you. It adds the perfect sound of the wind through the trees in my head, PLEASE DEAR LORD DON'T CHANGE THAT. :| The commas you ...

    Mar 13, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Sweet Affairs of Lambs and Lions

    I still need reviews, I apologize for the single bump. :)

    Mar 13, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Sweet Affairs of Lambs and Lions

    Thank you for the reviews already! I've edited it some, although I'm still thinking on how I want to say the first sentence, if I'm going to change it. Thank ...

    Mar 11, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Bethany

    I agree with needing more description. Not only is this a short piece (which I understand you were just wanting to know whether or not to continue, and I assure ...

    Mar 10, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Sweet Affairs of Lambs and Lions

    What is a day like today, which I feel so much undefined desire for? The air smells like sunshine--so sweet and warm. I’m drinking up long rays of light, tossed ...

    Mar 10, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Internet Interests

    Why do I love you? I hate loving you. But everytime You ask me another question My mouth won’t close Because maybe if I told you just one more thing ...

    Oct 26, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Doll

    AHHH! Thank you! I appreciate the completment so much!

    Sep 1, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Doll

    I'm sorry. I couldn't rewrite this as poetry, for I'm not a very good poet. ;)

    Aug 17, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Doll

    It's a metaphor. It's not SUPPOSED to make complete sense. And its not that the girl is a doll. It's that the doll is a girl. Its a person. Metaphorically ...

    Aug 16, 2008
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: End.

    Thank you! These last two compliments make me feel great about this story! They mean a lot to me!

    Aug 16, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Doll

    Thank you for the reviews! I've made edits that I hope are sufficient!

    Aug 15, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Doll

    You hang your head—how did you get here? There’s no past, no future, and hardly any now. The darkness surrounds, but there is an up, and a down. There’s all ...

    Aug 15, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Open Up [edit]

    I really like this. Creepy, and I agree with people, the white room added so much. While people says this doesn't have an ending, it does. It gives us a ...

    Aug 7, 2008
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Every Nook -edited-

    Thankyou for the review, and I agree, I hit the cliche point of insanity there. O_O. You're also right that I should rewrite, rewrite and rewrite. I think your review ...

    Aug 1, 2008


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