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Re: A moment of truth
This is very powerful. It's oozing with emotion, and it's easily transmitted to the reader. I like that. Your grammar could use a little bit of tidying, but that's pretty ...
Jan 25, 2011 -
Re: [September Contest] Pluto
Hah! Look how popular on a website you are now! Look at it... look at it.... ARE YOU LOOKING?! I'll assume you are. My name is TalaPaulwic, or as you ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: The Lifetime of a Raindrop
You start the piece in present tense. That's okay. Not a common thing to be used outside of chose your own adventure books. Not to much later you switch to ...
Sep 14, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] Penguin.
This is my submission for the September contest. It is 927 words long. I got the plot from the generator, and I really liked what came up. I don't have ...
Sep 14, 2010 -
Re: Rolling Stones vs. The Beatles
In my opinion I love the Beatles. All of their songs are AWESOME, Revolver is the best album ever made if you ask me. They're my favorite band in the ...
Sep 7, 2010 -
Re: Cheating
[TalaPaulwic enters from camera right.] Just little bits of detail like that could have made your script more effective. The problem with reading scripts is that you have no idea ...
Aug 19, 2010 -
Re: What Happens As You Watch A Man Die?
Oh wow. At first it sounded like it was a by-stander. Then the progression into being a murderous bastard. You told a long story in three paragraphs. An introduction, a ...
Aug 19, 2010 -
Re: Light and Darkness
Alright. Hello there. I am TalaPaulwic, and I will be reviewing you today. I have a few things that I would like to go over about this. I'm hoping I ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: World of Warcraft, but real.
**Hehehehe, well you're welcomed!**
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: World of Warcraft, but real.
Skyeler, Source of All Evil, TalaPaulwic, You, It, or Dkler. A deafening scream escaped her lips. Her voice was deeper so it wasn't as shrill as she hoped. "Morgan! It's ...
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: World of Warcraft, but real.
TalaPaulwic, Skyeler, or Dkler. She paced around in a fuss. Her feet stomped. It wasn't intentional in the slightest. Figuring out where her arms and feet went was always a ...
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: The Quest
Erich Nestel She seemed nice, but she just shoved him off, then left. A groan passed his lips. Shaking his head, he slowly moved into the room that she had ...
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: World of Warcraft, but real.
Go ahead and post, I'll post in a second.
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: World of Warcraft, but real.
I say that tomorrow we shall start it. Unless anyone objects?
Aug 2, 2010 -
Re: World of Warcraft, but real.
What is World of Warcraft? World of Warcraft is a widely popular video game for the computer. It evolved from the turned based strategy game, Warcraft. World of Warcraft (or ...
Aug 1, 2010
