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I wanted food, not a drumroll of bullets. What ever happened to fair play? First it was just one gunshot from some guy yelling 'NYPD', who I assumed to be ...

I don't know if you've ever been to New York, but oh my gosh that place is huge! I walked with my chin up, trying to calculate how high those ...

name- Rei age- 17 gender- female appearance- short hair, baggy clothes, looks much younger than she is. She's often mistaken for a boy personality- Aware of everything, but still bored, ...

I'm better than you... I pretend to be good at writing my music pretty much sucks I never was good at school never liked reading books I can't really tell ...

Oh my gosh that's awesome! I haven't been that engrossed in a story in soo long. 'but once a while' (7.2) - Should this be 'once in a while' or ...

Hey there I'm not much of a fan of reading lyrics, but this is really good. I love the imagery you've used, the contrast of a river of lava and ...

Hey there 'I had been staring at my refridgerator, deep in thought' - This line is brilliant, I don't know if it was supposed to be comical, but it made ...

Hey there What's the secret, what's the secret? Welcome to YWS! Okay, onto the poem. I really like the way it's laid out, and the repitition of 'Not just a ...

Pacing, pacing, always pacing. Professor Carmen scratched at his beared, nose scrunched with a childish annoyance. He worked his way up and down the diminished patch of brown carpet in ...

Hey there This is meant to be poetry? I agree that it's not very poetic. I didn't realise and read this as a story. Admittedly it has some flaws, but ...

Hey there Nice work! I loved your opening line, and the description following had me hooked. I was quite confused at first when you referred to the other person as ...

Hey there I shall apologise in advance. 'I already know you will love this poem,' - readers (especially on yws) in a way, challenge a writer. They pick apart the ...

Hey there, welcome to yws! I agree with firestarter in that your lines seem a bit too cluttered. I think line two doesn't make much sence because you've twisted and ...

Heyhey I loved it! The whole meaning is very deep, but your use of imigary is beautifully simple. Nice work. The only thing I can point out is that I ...

Heyhey I really like this. I agree with some of the others, it would be better if it was a bit longer. I especially like the way you've used powerful ...